Hot Potato! Short Story Collaboration #5 Laura Besley

8 Jul

Hot Potato

Welcome to Hot Potato!

8 writers over 16 weeks writing 1 short story

 The Potatoes: 

Ben Cooper, Gail Aldwin, Aksania Xenogrette, CJ Sullivan, AK Anderson, Laura Besley, Gwendolyn Salzman, Natalie Elizabeth Beech

Here’s the fifth fortnightly instalment of our collaborative short story, this time featuring potato/writer LAURA BESLEY who is taking AK’s ‘middle’ and continuing the story however she likes….

In case you need a reminder of how our story began you can find Ben’s beginning here, Gail’s ‘middle’ here , CJ’s ‘middle’ here, AK’s ‘middle’ here


Here’s Laura’s contribution:


But it was too late. As the echoes of her father’s cries rang out around the abandoned carousel hall, Chloe had already touched the strange robotic girl, with sparks of blue light flashing intermittently out of her open head.

‘No,’ her father whispered.

Chloe turned to face her father and looked pleadingly into his eyes, as she had done many times as a child. Am I in trouble? her eyes asked.

Her father took a step towards her and as he did the robo-girl moved her arm, which clanged into the dilapidated fence with a thud, sending a ripple around them.

Chloe turned away from her father and faced the robo-girl. ‘Hello?’ she asked quietly. Are you okay?’

‘Chloe, let’s go,’ her father said. ‘Now.’

‘But Dad, we can’t just leave her.’

‘We can.’

‘How can you be so mean?’

‘Chloe, you’ve never seen one of these robots before. They were all destroyed before you were born. You’ll need to trust me. We have to go.’

Chloe took one last look as the robo-girl stood up, swaying gently on her thick metal legs, and stared straight past Chloe. She turned to see what the machine was looking at: it was her father.

‘Jeff,’ the robo-girl said, in a voice higher and more human than Chloe could ever have imagined.

‘No,’ her father said gently, one hand outstretched as if to ward her off. ‘My name is Pete. Peter David.’

‘Darling Jeff,’ the robot said. ‘I’ve missed you.’

‘I’m Peter, not Jeff.’

The robo-girl started walking towards him, tentatively at first and then more sure on her feet.

Chloe looked at her father in confusion.

‘Run!’ he shouted, grabbing Chloe’s hand. They ran through the rusty ruins of the carousel and out into the fresh September air. ‘We need to get to safety and phone it in,’ he yelled, between gasps of breath. ‘They’re all supposed to be dead.’

They could hear the heavy footsteps of robo-girl behind them. Ever louder, ever closer.

Suddenly she was on top of Peter, forcing him to the ground. Her weight was more than Peter could stand and he was struggling to breath. A flash from robo-girl’s head flew out and killed him immediately.

‘Dad?’ Chloe said. She shook him, but his body was limp.



If you want to find out more about Laura  and her writing you can do so here:

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Laura’s text was passed to potato Gwendolyn Salzman on Friday. The next instalment of our short story will be on Monday 22nd July. I’m looking forward to seeing where Gwendolyn  takes us……..

FYI: The writer’s are progressively taking up the structure of beginning, middle and end. The writers can take the story where ever they like.



One Response to “Hot Potato! Short Story Collaboration #5 Laura Besley”

  1. AK July 8, 2013 at 12:31 pm #

    Reblogged this on A.K. Anderson | Science Fiction and Fantasy Author and commented:
    Here is the next installment of the Hot Potato story! Where will it land?

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